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former182

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I wrote this chapter a few weeks ago, but writer's block soon hit me. So suggestions will be appreciated. I don't have any choices written because of the forementioned writer's block.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/11s13WK0gJxNyyNh71lqDheHgLMFoOvvh0tuqyqiovoQ/edit?usp=sharing

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Re: Review my upcoming (and perhaps other people's) chapters for the MMWiki
« Reply #1 on: November 05, 2014, 12:16:55 AM »
I really liked it, did you want to end it there or keep it going for a bit and then add options?

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« Reply #2 on: November 05, 2014, 07:31:30 AM »
At the moment, I don't know if I should add more or leave as is.

I probably should add more, so the clerks have a bit of a personality for others to use, but again, Writer's block hits me when I try to write more to this chapter.

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« Reply #3 on: November 05, 2014, 04:56:50 PM »
I think it would be safe to end it there, just brainstorm a few options for what happens next maybe?

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« Reply #4 on: November 06, 2014, 02:36:41 PM »
I really can't think of a good pair of choices at the moment, other than describing how much control the clothes have over their wearers.

It'd range from the clerks only have control over their eyes to the only reason they can't scream is because even the lipstick they have on is possessed.

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« Reply #5 on: November 06, 2014, 06:09:01 PM »
That's a good idea, maybe add options based off of the different clerks? Remember people can add more options themselves so you aren't really restricting people by not adding every possibility.

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« Reply #6 on: November 07, 2014, 10:02:21 AM »
I'll think about it. I also should probably give the clerks names.

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« Reply #7 on: November 29, 2014, 12:32:53 AM »
So has your mind freed itself of it's writers block? Want more help/ideas?

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« Reply #8 on: December 01, 2014, 07:42:02 AM »
Well, the writer's block was due to me working on a fanfic that I recently completed. Then I couldn't get to work because... Well it was thanksgiving and it seemed like everyone I lived with thought, 'he's at his computer, therefore he's doing nothing'. Pretty much par for the course for after Turkey day for anyone that sits down in front of a computer.

Thankfully, I'll be able to sit down and work on the chapter a bit more this weekend. Improve some rough spots, flesh out the detail, actually add choices, and etc.

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« Reply #9 on: December 01, 2014, 02:48:52 PM »
Lovely, I enjoyed second thanksgiving too! (Excuse for more turkey)

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Re: Review my upcoming (and perhaps other people's) chapters for the MMWiki
« Reply #10 on: December 07, 2014, 09:08:23 PM »
Chapter is up on the Wiki. I'll have another chapter written next Sunday. Dunno what it will be an addition to, though.

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« Reply #11 on: December 08, 2014, 03:53:17 PM »
Loved the chapter! Now you've got me all excited for next Sunday!

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« Reply #12 on: December 21, 2014, 10:06:18 PM »
Sorry about being late. Was really tired for awhile. So to make up for it, here's two chapters. Both are for different plotpaths in the same story, though.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F7NZlTmIfUUoH_gc3Jvkb4-QLH14u48cdhma7y2_agE/edit?usp=sharing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1B-8B-v6HhEuGMAP3S6mYcaBFL4-5LDpygvgR-WTViQs/edit?usp=sharing

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« Reply #13 on: December 22, 2014, 02:57:50 AM »
Really awesome (I especially hope you do that bodysuit of underwear option someday)!

Just a spellcheck: on this one https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F7NZlTmIfUUoH_gc3Jvkb4-QLH14u48cdhma7y2_agE/edit you wrote 'under' instead of 'underwear' right at the end.

Loved it all!

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« Reply #14 on: December 22, 2014, 07:23:01 AM »
Thanks, TheCanadian, for pointing out the error.