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TheLivingSocks

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A test story.
« on: January 27, 2018, 09:33:50 AM »
Kind of just a work in process to try new things with my writing: Descriptions, ideas, kinks, etc.

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Re: A test story.
« Reply #1 on: January 27, 2018, 11:22:26 AM »
I love this story! For some reason it's a little tough to follow (for me, not saying it's that way for everyone else though), when the socks have names. It could just be a personal preference though. I find it's easier to follow when their descriptions are used, but I can imagine it gets tiring to write "the white anklets" or other types of socks over and over again. Probably just means I need to pay more attention, but I really liked the action here, the story, and how you can tell the socks do care about him, but want to be a more than just a silent partner in the relationship with him and his girlfriend. If I had a boyfriend that I wasn't sure had a sock fetish like myself and I was in the Desmond role, I could also see myself trying to negotiate with his socks in a very similar manner. Can't wait to see where this goes! Nice job.
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Re: A test story.
« Reply #2 on: January 27, 2018, 11:54:17 AM »
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For some reason it's a little tough to follow (for me, not saying it's that way for everyone else though), when the socks have names.

Really? See I was thinking the opposite all this time, not having names was making things more confusing, thus the reason trying out this story with names. Hmmm, maybe I missed the ball on that one.

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but I can imagine it gets tiring to write "the white anklets" or other types of socks over and over again.

It does get tiring, but I also think giving names to socks isn't the answer, but tried it out anyway. Giving one pair a name is fine, but too many and it just feels wrong. At the same token, you are right, saying 'the white knee high socks with the blue and grey stripes' just sucks...it helps with the knee highs, as they can be called 'beer socks' or whatever, but being flavorful and various with other descriptions is proving difficult. I suppose I should try more color patterned socks or something, but white socks are best socks. :/ I have to figure something out, if more socks become sentient in the future.

As for the attempt on the more romanticized side of the story, I'm glad it's working. Tried to dole out personalities to help define the three pairs of socks thus far, with the knee socks being more brazen and 'wild' The anklets timid, and the thigh highs the 'boss.' We'll see where it goes from here, gonna try to keep writing it and my main story. Like I said, this one will probably have a very loose plot-line, with me just writing whatever I feel like at the time.

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Re: A test story.
« Reply #3 on: January 27, 2018, 12:03:45 PM »
Like I said, it might just be me so don't change anything until you've gotten more feedback from others. I tend to get overly descriptive in my head when I read stories, so that may be where it comes from. I think the "beer socks" thing worked though, every time they were mentioned, I had the clear image in my head. maybe a compromise might work, having a description every now and then just to keep it fresh for others, but again, I'd wait on that until you hear from more people. I'm pretty sure this is most definitely just a "me-thing."

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Like I said, this one will probably have a very loose plot-line, with me just writing whatever I feel like at the time.

I think that's perfectly fine as well to start with, kinda like doodling to find what you like in a picture/drawing. Again, nice job, and I can't wait to read more. :)
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Re: A test story.
« Reply #4 on: January 27, 2018, 06:08:44 PM »
Very good so far, I like the naming, it helps.